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The woman called Alice walks alone through the hollow streets, a seed planted in her sterile heart and a rifle sleeping in her belt. Last night, she'd witnessed the popping of Pérignon, and a dazzling display of fireworks, complete with alcohol-polished emotions and hundreds of thousands of citizens pulsing rowdy fanfare. She'd netted her highest number of kills that fateful day. Blood still rests in the creases of her palms.

A streetlamp greets her brightly with its mild glow, and alerts her to a dirty and disheveled homeless man groveling for money on the other side of the street. The young couple next to him give a feeble attempt to back away, claiming they have none to spare.

"Lies," Alice whispers. She can easily see the pearls jingling from the lady's neck, and a well-crisped suit guarding the young man from the night chill. Money is more than expendable to them. And this city could do without this attractive mask of a couple. They, too, are expendable. Alice begins to take aim at the trio, and narrows her eyes as her shot takes place.

The bullet cleaves through the young man's aorta, and a geyser of undesirable rubies gush from the gaping hole. The lady screams at the top of her lungs as life quickly leeches from him and returns to the earth. The lady, no, the girl shrieks again and flees into an alley. The filthy man stumbles while trying to do the same, and Alice's next bullet burrows into his head. Tissue and gore are spray-painted onto the aqua and white walls, tainting the foundation of her beautiful home.

She'd grown up in this city, and spent her life in its domain. As the small village grew into the metropolitan miracle it was today, Alice grew with a viciously vindictive nature and a natural ability to murder. She frequently stole undesirables' lives, and in turn, the city granted her longevity. She eventually began to know the city's sewers as lungs, the streets as veins, and the buildings as ribs, protecting her home and its fragile infrastructure heart.

Alice recalls this once again for perhaps the umpteenth time, and a hint of a smile forms on her lips. She takes long, careful strides across the street and reaches the decaying alley. This final undesirable is toxic. She must be eliminated.

Even now, Alice can see her trembling in the midnight corner, hear the words spilling over and into a cell phone, each syllable carrying more weight under her desperation. Alice's eyes lock with hers, and the latter radiates terror. Fingers grasp, and the phone is suddenly in shattered scraps of metal and hideous memories. She shrieks, screams, wails for any form of aid, but none is forthcoming.

Alice quivers with a fierce anticipation. One more bullet would kindle her hearth to an extent. And said projectile soars through the air and easily breaks through the surface of the undesirable's skin. She clutches her heart in a vain effort to fix her broken dam of life. Alice turns on her heel and begins to walk.

She takes in the clatter of pearls, the ebbing screams, and trickling residue slowly dripping into a shared soul. She allows herself to smile again: three are now bad memories. Only a few hundreds of thousands remain, a stain on what used to be a wonderland.
I thought of so many endings to this. :XD: I found this the only suitable.

My response to a request from CheshireCaine , who asked for a story about someone who intentionally commits sins, but only because s/he feels it to be moral.

Comments welcome! :la:
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Wow, so very dark and intense. Great capture of Alice's apathy and psychosis.

The only suggestion I would have it perhaps a tiny bit more elaboration on why exactly those people (or any people) are undesirable. Even just an added sentence or two in the section about her past to really emphasize why she was so convinced she was doing the right thing. It wouldn't necessarily have to be the direct fault of another person, just greater description of her disgust/rage/etc.

Other than that though, the action and pacing was great, and even though the descriptions are sparse, the imagery is still strong. Excellent work.
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My favorite is this:  She eventually began to know the city's sewers as lungs, the streets as veins, and the buildings as ribs, protecting her home and its fragile infrastructure heart.  Beautiful and dark, Strong imagery for sure.  Nicely done!
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Aerode Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :love:
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
She frequently stole undesirables' lives, and in turn, the city granted her longevity. She eventually began to know the city's sewers as lungs, the streets as veins, and the buildings as ribs, protecting her home and its fragile infrastructure heart.

What an unexpected Alice! :omg: She and the city become one and the same.

This is closer to what I used to write, a dozen and more years ago. But what I wrote then pales in comparison to Wonderland. This breathes life and death simultaneously. Bravo!
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Aerode Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: Thank you so much. And your diversity in literature's pretty impressive!
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes: Thanks!
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CheshireCaine Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Woah! This is great. I'd mention a specific component that makes it so, but I really can't narrow it down. Seriously, fantastic.
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Aerode Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :love: I'm glad you like it.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
An interesting twist to Alice In Wonderland- I like how you entwined Alice and the city as one, she taking lives of the callous in exchange for the city extending hers.

Your opening paragraph is arguably the strongest in the whole piece, full of desolate imagery and hooks the reader almost immediately.

This is one of my favorite works from you.
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Aerode Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:eager: Thank you so much for the amazing words! You made my day.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
You are quite welcome. It was my pleasure entirely.
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