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these weary atoms are constantly
wreathed into genetic ornaments and
recycled from human to human.

i can trace my veins off into the brazen
custody of our prescribed atmosphere.

bring me to where the world ends
and the horizon collides with the heavens,
because i'd like to recreate myself into
something new.

or at least fade among the hydrogen
furnaces, returning to a cosmic cradle.
"Our planet, our society, and we ourselves are built of star stuff."

-- Carl Sagan (Cosmos)

My writing's been wonky for the past few days. :noes: I'm not sure if I like it.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No offence meant, but atoms of stars are independent and are not related to atoms forming genetic ornaments. :bucktooth:

(Opinion borne from studying BS Applied Biosciences for four years)

With that said, I believe that the concept of us wanting to restructure ourselves into something as "perfect" as the stars is an interesting concept to take up. At the same time, I feel that the idea of resurrection ("bring me to where the world ends/ and the horizon collides with the heavens") is discussed to the interest of the audience. Its overall, a decent poem, and its food for thought. Good work.
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Aerode Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:lmao: Thank you so much for everything.

Applied Bioscience? :nuu: Sounds painful.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) Anytime.

Surprisingly no. Its quite fun :)
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OnigiriPandahats Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. I love the concept and it's worded in a way that can be imagined as anything! Brain overload...Cannotevenplz 
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Aerode Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :love:
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gossamerdissonance Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful
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Aerode Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :love:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Student General Artist
I love the concept and how you phrased it, so deeply evocative imagery Heart 
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Aerode Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :happybounce:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is wonderful in every single way and i love it.  great work :heart:
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